Hi!

I enjoyed the animation.  Having read the first 2 scripts I know it begins dialogue-heavy.  In cases like that, when the characters are giving long speeches, it's good to break the single shot up into a few different angles, or even just give a close-up now or then.  The series I do is dialogue based, so I'm always being conscious to do this.

I think the dialogue should have begun with "Prologue", or something else, instead of "Narration".  I was blown away by your animated logo before that!

The biggest improvement that needs to be made is the audio quality.  The voice acting and music were excellent, but the volume was inconsistent and the variations in the actors' microphones was prominent, with some actors talking with static in the background.  All in all, a very good film.  You wrote extensive additional dialogue and it was very well-written.  When you get to the second part, the 2 things I recommend are 1) add a battle scene just before or after the narration in part 1A which gives a glimpse of something coming up, and 2) see if the voice talent can make better recordings.

2000+ frames for 4 minutes?  That's impressive in itself.  I'm glad to be a part of this one.

Hey HOO,

I am glad you enjoyed it!

I do agree on this part very much, the main reason I didn't revolve a lot of different shots is the fact I was worried I wasn't going to be able to complete the scene within the time frame I had. My main worry was that if I left it overnight and I returned there may have been serious camera bumps or something would be moved so I filmed that night for 8 long hours.

I have to say I am 100% in agreeance with you on this. This is infact the first time I've had voices that were so inconsistent with each other that I just didn't really know how I was going to match them up. Some sounded like they were closer to the microphone and others sounded like they were spoken further from the microphone. If I Were A Minifig told about this, and said that needed fixing. Truthfully speaking, there wasn't a whole lot I could do from my end, even after the upload the voices seemed fine from my end. But as I mentioned on my channel I have yet to test it on another computer so I am sorry about that. Rest assured in the next vids, audio will be improved and better looked at!

Thats a really good point! When I get my second part done, if I do end up connecting the whole episode as 1 part instead of two, I'll change that part!

Well heres the funny thing, originally there was meant to be a battle scene that the narration would be talking over, but I just don't have the time or space to have made that possible. But honestly it was something I really wanted to do. But as I said, as I make my way to the second part of episode 1 (Not currently sure when that will be) but when I do, I'll see if I can fix up the episode and change the narration for a battle scene. Also I do agree the voicing does needs changing, Darren and Tony are characters that will continue on in the series and even Brick7 has a part thankfully I got all her voices done which she did an amazing job. So I am really excited to get to the second part. Finally a bit of action will begin!

Thanks bud! it was a really great journey for me! And I am that you are around! When I start episode 2, I'll keep you updated.
Thanks for you're great feedback bud!

Hey Slurping Animations!
Thanks for your feedback! I do agree that it did feel short, that's why hopefully when I release part 2 it will make up for that, with a bit of action in it!
The voicing for this film would have been its biggest flaw, as I said to HOO unfortunetly the voices I received were all very differently done.
Thanks Slurping Animations!

Sincerely,
Divine.

For a first timer - it's a pretty big undertaking. 

Audio levels can be adjusted in your video editor.  Once you know how, it's something you'll do automatically and instinctually. 

The one I had in mind was the big Clone speech.  If you have the time to get a session once in a while, you can do that will all the speeches.  In Holding Our Own Ep 2, Angela is giving a lot of long narration as a DJ, and I broke it up into 3 parts, with the second part shot more close-up.  1 and 3 were the control parts.  Even something as simple as this can break things up.