Like so?

Also, thanks for the warning about the language. Normally I'd just avoid watching something like this once warned, but I decided this time to mute the audio and comment on just the video.

Now, there seems to be a large amount of light flicker and the animation gets pretty choppy and doesn't ease in/out very well. It seems to be a bit better at the start, but quickly descends in quality. Also, there are only about four or five different camera angles in the whole thing. That's not a huge problem, but mixing that up and adding some more will help give it more visual interest. On that subject, there seemed to be a lot of empty space above the characters.
Moving the camera down to center things more would help balance that out.

And lastly, the set was little more than a big gray wall, two boxes and a doorway. Not much, and somewhat boring.
It really needs something in the wall to break up the gray, then some more props scattered around to help fill it out.
The brick construction tried to help, with the interlocked layers, then the stacked, then more interlocked, but that alone can't solve it.

The voice acting is quite good, but I was distracted by just how much swearing and drug referencing there was. Obviously some is necessary in context, but it seemed like you were trying to shoehorn in as much as possible and the amount didn't feel natural.

Ha ha thanks for that Pritchard!

And yea not a problem, I am wary of members of the forum not participating being part of brickfilms that require or have course language in there.

I am thankful for you taking the time to judge the video with the audio muted!

Yes unfortunately the light flicker couldn't be avoided. The fact I used lamps in a completely dark room I feel that the light flicker was caused by a flickery bulb. I did make attempts to fix this unfortunately there was nothing I could do at the time.

I will definetly work more on the ease in/out for the time I thought it was alright but there definetley could be improvement. Which I will hopefully work on in the next film.

Yea I agree with you completely for this. I did notice the lack of props and set design in terms of the room they were in. I just didn't really know what to make out of it at the time, but hopefully this is something I will improve in time, thank you for your great feedback.

funmiproductions,
Hey there thanks for your feedback I appreciate it.
The swearing definetly plays a major part in the story should it continue. Yes I do agree that the camera angles are very basic at the least, however I have never done camera angles before but this is something I do hope to improve later on.

Yeah I do apologize for that, I do hopefully plan to fix up set designs and add more props in future for this scene it was really meant to be more of an empty room or basement kind of thing but I can see the flaws that came with it. Which hopefully I'll be able to correct in future.

Thanks mate appreciate it!

sillypenta,
Hey there silly I can totally understand how you would be distracted by the strong use of course language and drug reference, however this was crucial to the story especially in expressing what kind of characters these people are. But I totally understand and agree with your point. I was also most pleased with the voice actors as well they did a fantastic job. Thank you for your feedback.

SlothPaladin,
Thanks for your feedback and response, I do agree with you to some degree with the use of swearing, especially on Franks part but I just felt that if it was left out that it wouldn't go smoothly or as effectively in delievering the message it was meant to. But I can see where your coming from in terms of repeat.

This is definitely something I felt strongly about the same way you do. Originally I did want to make it much faster than what it is. However I just felt that if it was a second long or any shorter that it wouldn't look as realistic or it would be too fast, however I do also agree it could have been faster.
The way I thought of it when I was overlooking the 14 second mark was that Frank was shaking inside and he had like a meltdown phrase were he went much slower than normal. But I do appreciate your concern and feedback and will work on it in future.

Thank you all for your feedback, concerns and advice.

Sincerely,
Divine.

Last edited by Divine (July 11, 2014 (08:42pm))

Ohh alright I understand what you mean, The use of F word was quite frequent and therefore repetitive, I do agree that variety would be nice. I'll be sure to fix this in future films.

Thanks for clarifying and I'll be sure to check out The thick of it, should I need a variety in profanity or if I do return back to Lego Underworld.

Sincerely,
Divine.