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Last summer I shot some test footage of soldier fighting in some ruins, and since then I've been wanting to make a short film around it. I just finished scripting a story for it, and I was wondering if someone would be willing to give feedback on it.
Warning: This would be fairly spoilerly if you watch the finished product
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1m6N … sp=sharing
I love it!
If you really work on improving your animation, and add to that a great voice cast, then this short can really come alive. It's a great script, and is worthy of a top-notch execution. 
Random question: How are you planning on merging the more desaturated color tones of noir with the more colorful and flashy effects and designs this seems to call for? Sci-fi and noir seem to almost the opposites, yet I think if you could nail the right balance, then it would have a delightfully new and original feel.
If anything, the script itself leans more to the sci-fi side, so I suggest adding design cues and more visual hints that emphasize the noir side of things.
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