This was awesome.
The animation was great, the camera movements were great, the set was really great, and overall this was enjoyable. You had some great bits of animation in there two, the robot fight was really cool (especially the ending). The lighting looked pretty nice in some shots too. The music was well done and definitely fitting.
Of course, the writing does have one or two problems. First off, I think you had too many characters for a 7 minute film, and most of them had no more then two or three lines of dialogue. For example, the squishy character could have been cut out of the film completely. He kind of added nothing, it was just there for the sake of it. We never needed to see the saboteur, we just knew he was onboard. (also, the name "squishy" is way too silly for a more serious film). It might have been better to have given the few character that do speak a lot more dialogue, not random dialogue like orders or reports, but "story dialogue".
Also, I think I cared more about the antagonists then the protagonists. They had much more story behind them and didn't say/do anything really evil. If you want us to root for the good guys, you should focus the story more on them. They didn't evil seem evil, I just knew they were bad because of the clothing they wore. STEAM seemed like the bad guys to be completely honest.
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The part with the sister was a great idea, but it had absolutely no build up and kind of came out of the blue. When the captain[?] says "you shouldn't have done that", I thought he meant shooting the gun at him.
Also, some of the lines could have been a bit more creative. "Why not?", seemed a bit boring. the line: "it doesn't matter how, they just are" is pretty bad. It actually kind of does matter how, because if we (the audience) know nothing about the papers, how are we supposed to care about them? I think you could have briefly explained their importance. And then finally, "We're losing altitude" is sort of pointless. I would assume that that is a that bad and threating thing, and we are never really told if the problem is solved.
It watched it about three times before I finally understood everything. Still please note that this film was really enjoyable regardless of all that stuff I just mentioned. I am probably critiquing this too much considering its only a seven minute film, but I figured I might as well put in what I thought. Unlike some of your other films, this one didn't flow very well. Ax 2 told a story very well in an even shorter amount of time.
Anyways, great job! I look forward to your future projects.
EDIT: Oh, wow, this is a really long review. Why do I keep making such long posts lately? Gosh.
Last edited by PushOverProductions (February 7, 2014 (10:34am))
no more brickfilming *sad face*.