It's too static. It's not "course", it's "coarse". It's too wordy. Sorry to be so negative, but there's very little difference between this animation and a typed sheet of paper.

No. It's not "course language" - that doesn't make sense. And "static" doesn't have anything to do with the audio -- it's just the opposite of "dynamic". In an earlier critique, I asked if you have ever heard of "show, don't tell". What this refers to is trying to avoid having a minifig plonked in front of the camera and telling the viewer the plot. You're just handing out information; that's why I compared it to a piece of paper. It isn't very interesting. Instead, you could be showing, through action, what you mean. That is a lot more interesting.

The picture quality is good. The sound quality is good. Everything else needs a lot of work. In my humble opinion. And you did ask for people's opinions -- if you are easily offended, then don't ask.

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I finally got to watch.  The frame rate is low.  Maybe a bit more back & forth between the characters would make the dialogue, which is actually well-written, to be more dynamic.

People are always going to get criticism for their work but it's usually well-intentioned.  Now you will have a few who are all negative, but it's nothing to take personally.

Well, I'm Italian, so people I talk with often DO move their hands ALL THE TIME.
That aside, when I animate "Holding Our Own", I make the characters move their hands on accented words.  And since Lego animation is NOT real life, sometimes a bit more of that than real life breaks up the monotony of static imaging.

Firstly, I apologise as stated above, I have edited what I though was offensive, but as said, your second comment clarified otherwise.

The reason for the minifig, seemingly explaining the whole plot, was as a film opening, there are alot of films, they do movies in reverse, as showing the ending as the beginning then showing you halfway how it all happened, reverse filming if you will.
Alot of mafia movies, start with openings, some without action some just dialog, sorry you did not find it interesting, I understand it would be better put into action, but when in action, action at times does not speak as words do.
But I will work on that next time, so thanks.

thank you for some positive feedback, it does mean alot to the film creator, and in future I would still like feedback and reviews from you, sorry for any misunderstandings and thanks again for your reply.

Kind regards,

Generalned

Always when I animate I try to make it much realistic as I can. I don't mean that I don't do fantasy and sci-fi because they're fiction but like minifigures in a city (for example), they're like humans there. I don't like stories that tells like how LEGOs really are, I mean for example if minifigure is in a car crash accident and it's deadly for humans, the minifigure dies too... I like and "support" that. But if minifigure just breaks and it's still "alive"... and other minifigures fix it back to "LEGO life"... nah I just don't like that.

(I hope you understand what the heck I'm saying, because I told it very hard )

Anyway I'm Finnish and here people won't use hands very much if they're talking, sometimes of course if the things are hard to explain. And I know what kind of people Italians are . And I understand. But yeah the thing what I'm saying is just that I like brickfilms that are realistic with the people in films like they're humans in the films, not just LEGO figures, toys...

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That's funny, because I just watch Michael Hitchkox (sp?) LEGO CAR CRASH and the lego crashed and was put back together again and lived.  Now, I know that it's unrealistic, but it IS a cartoon, and what I love about classic cartoons is the anything-goes mentality, especially in the Tex Avery category.  The fact that they are works of art means that their potential is limited to the imagination of the director.

I'd love you to check out the first part of the episode of ep 2 of Holding Our Own, which I just posted.  I try for a realist approach.  I'd like to know your opinion of my style.  But I do like to put an occassional visual gag in (like a character's head spinning 360 degrees) just to remind viewers it IS a cartoon.