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Enemy forces have made a decisive move against the capital of Australia, and the U.S. has deployed forces in defense of their southern ally.
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Re: Australian Incursion

Wow, it’s not every day you see a brickfilm set in Canberra!

Anyways, I thought your animation, sound design and effects were nice, but I didn’t understand what was going on... Who was who? Did someone win? Maybe you should establish that more clearly in your next film.
Good Job overall though mini/smile

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Re: Australian Incursion

Just like Emma said, it's impossible to tell which side is which. Your description indicates that there is a good side and a bad side, but which is which. You included radio chatter for both sides, but in this type of film you should be focusing on the good side so that the audience sympathizes with them. I felt very neutral toward a battle in which my country was fighting. I would suggest stating which side is which at the beginning somehow. The animation is almost there, it just needs a slightly higher frame rate. mini/smile

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I liked it. However, I felt that a little bit of "story" was needed (I know it's a war movie  and that it's just 1:46 long but a main character or something would make it even better).

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Re: Australian Incursion

looked great but i noticed the characters really lost speed when they turned on one leg

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Thanks for all the helpful feedback guys!

EmmaExecute wrote:

Wow, it’s not every day you see a brickfilm set in Canberra!

Anyways, I thought your animation, sound design and effects were nice, but I didn’t understand what was going on... Who was who? Did someone win? Maybe you should establish that more clearly in your next film.
Good Job overall though mini/smile

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Yes, I'll definitely work on trying to make the plot more understandable.  There was not supposed to be a 'good' and 'bad' side, just two warring factions.   

backyardlegos wrote:

I felt very neutral toward a battle in which my country was fighting.

That was intentional, but I do understand how it doesn't engage the viewer as much.

thekingofbricks wrote:

looked great but i noticed the characters really lost speed when they turned on one leg

Haha, I realized that too.  It's a problem with my animation abilities...needs to be fixed.  Practice makes perfect.

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It was a little messy, but I'm sure you'll improve with time.

The lack of roundabouts also broke any illusion that it was set in Canberra. Any realistic portrayal of Canberra would have had a roundabout at least every fifty metres.