Wow, you're improving a lot. I have to agree with most of what Tobias says in the post above: you managed to build a good atmosphere, although some shots were too fast, but at the end I think you made a bad choice of music and sound. If it looked scary, the last two "soundtracks choices" made it sound a bit like a comedy. And I think that the fact of not putting any music at all right at the end of the video didn't help. It almost completely killed the whole atmosphere and suspance you build up before. Still, many of the angles were interesting, and the animation, although not completely fitting in some parts, was good enough to not have many still or repeated frames (I spotted one or two, I think), those usually bother me. Also, lighting was good, but you could have studied for a more interesting light. But well, it is fine that way.
Anyway, I think you could have made up a more interesting story
Spoiler (highlight to read)Like telling how did he get there, or you could have made the set look more like a labyrinth, or something, to make it look a more believable place, and there you could have added some parts to help increasing the suspance. Also, I have to agree with that youtuber who says "00:42 to 00:50 doesn't make much sense". It's true, it's like if you wanted to go deeper in the story but didn't manage to shot that part, and just left that montage there.
Anyway, better than many of the other entries I have seen. 3/5
Btw, Darth Vincent Price has a wonderful voice.
Oh, CDP, I don't think that just pointing out lightflickers and camera bumps help that much. I mean, he probably already noticed them. And you don't have to use emoticons when you point that out, it gets annoying after a while.