Topic: Jack Burke: and the quest for the Gems of Intelligence (Idea)

I hope this dosent sound to stereotyped.....NOTE: I havn't really written any of the script yet.

Jack Burke, a middle aged adventurer, was not all that smart when he was a small boy. His friends would tease him about not having enough smarts to stay in school. Now Jack, must go on the adventure of his lifetime. Not just to search for the Gems Of Intelligene but to unlock a part of him he has never known.

What do you think? Any critiques?

I'm working on getting my studio back up and running, so stay posted...

Re: Jack Burke: and the quest for the Gems of Intelligence (Idea)

What is forcing him to go on this journey? That itself is a plot hole big enough to fit an eight-lane highway into.

Re: Jack Burke: and the quest for the Gems of Intelligence (Idea)

Hmmm... Yes your right. I havn't really thought about that part yet but I'll get to it.

I'm working on getting my studio back up and running, so stay posted...