The video wasn't bad, it had some good parts in there, but some things need a little tweaking. So here's my long post of advice.

First, you must remember that with dialogue, there must be eye contact. If the people are talking to each other, they need to look at each other. There are exceptions to this rule, however. Sometimes people don't make eye contact and stare off into space, and sometimes people look away trying to avoid eye contact. However, I couldn't tell if they guy in gray wanted to make eye contact, or wanted to look away when talking when his head moved. People don't generally move their heads when speaking, so keeping the head relatively still is ok.

The hand movements were good, although they needed some easing, but they fit the talking well, so that was good.

I know you were mostly concerned with the dialogue, but I couldn't help but notice that the fire was perfectly in focus even when the torch was out of focus. A slight blur effect on the fire to match that of the depth of field would help.

I would also like to point out the camera angle change at 0:07 (this isn't really an issue, it's just a small "bonus" tip ). Instead of moving the camera slightly so you can change the focus and see the guy's face while he's talking, you should frame the shot so both people can speak without needing to change the camera angle. If you accidentally bumped the camera while changing the focus and had to move it, then it should be moved to a different angle. Possibly behind the shoulder of the guard.

I hope these tips will help you! You've got some great potential here, just a few things that could use a bit more practice.

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Hey Rioforce,

Firstly, thank you for taking your time to write this great feedback.

Thats a good question to be honest, and I agree with you in the aspect of always remembering that eye contact is essential for fluent dialog. However for this particular scene I avoided that to allow the viewers to see the characters face, but in the scene I made it as if the man was inspecting the Boarian outpost while making conversation.

I'm glad you thought it fit in well, I did as well. But I do agree that easing is essential this something I wish to work on as well for future films.

haha It stood out that well did it? Ha ha, I do agree with you now that I look at it. I actually didn't notice the torch was out of focus until you really mentioned it. I will remember to blur it next time thanks for pointing that out!

Now this tip was probably the one I was most curious as too, I've been trying to depict what you are saying and I'll take a guess at it. Are you referring to when the camera slightly moved angles? If so it was mainly because I wanted to try and get his face more in the frame there was no set bumps thankfully, I hate it and when it happens I tend to start from scratch. But what would you have had me do? When you say take it behind the shoulder of the guard, are you referring the camera frame the pic of the man as if his infront of the camera? If so does that break the 180 degrees rule SlothPaladin is speaking of? Or were you referring to the focus changing at 0:07? I wish I was able to put better focus on several characters but I am unable, however this does have it's benifit of knowning who is speaking and which character to focus on.

These were very helpful thank you for your time writing these great tips and helpful information really appreciated man and thank you for believing I got potential it does really motivate me and makes me happy to know people do notice my vids so thanks for that man, Hope future vids will only improve and you's will notice em with each new vid.

Hi SlothPaladin thanks for your feedback, and thank you for the link. You know I never knew about this rule before and read about it and can see what your referring to, but did it really cross 180 degrees in that ending shot? I think your right about it tho. Thank you for the tip but then what should I do? to fix this up especially if I want to get a different angle, for example shooting infront of the man at the gate from the guards shoulder as suggested by Rioforce. Does it only mainly apply in dialog shooting? Does it matter when the scene reference changes? I'd love to know.

Sincerely,
Divine.

Haha thank you for taking your time to do the pics RioForce, infact you did it really well as well! You nailed the man's constume (Gray) and the setting of the scene nice work.

I do understand what you are referring to now it wasn't clear at first but now it makes sense.

The only main problem for me, inregards to doing the over the shoulder method where it changing sides or across different angles is I don't really know what would work for the back ground, in fact what did you use for frame two? It looks as if it's a black poster blurred out? Or main focus is on the main.

Ohh so if their on the same side the rule is still kept. 

So Rioforce I had a look at the rule of thirds (Another thing I'm not aware of) and I read about it, but I'm curious as too why it's needed? Is the heads/faces of the minifigs meant to stay in the middle of the 3 lines? Thank you for putting it none the less and how could I make use of it during animation to really help me?

Thanks.

Sincerely,
Divine.

Hey RioForce,

Thank you for the great tips especially with the extra wall! I'm going to be doing it in my future films!

I have been reading about the rule of thirds and has got me interested I am just wondering how I can make use of a grid so I can make sure I am applying the rule of thirds.

I'll look into it!

I can't believe it was almost there if I only moved it a little more one of the reasons I didn't I'd like to mention was to show at me more of the gate/fire and beyond it.

But thank you for great help/tips and feedback I really appreciate it. It's been very helpful and will help for my upcoming films which hopefully I will make use of these tips.

Sincerely,
Divine.

The rule of thirds does not have to be super exact, you should be able to get things by eyeballing it, just think about balance as you set the image up, when you watch movies you like try to see how they balanced the characters in the frame. When you see cool things around town make a little frame with your fingers and try to make some pleasing images

Well now that you know they exist you can think about them for future shots, just knowing they are out there should help you get better.