Topic: Anyone Want to Critique my Script?

So last night I made a script based off a short story that my Dad wrote when he was 14. I want to make it really good because this is the first time I've taken a book and turned it into a script.  So PM me if you want to read it.

Thank You.

Last edited by Binding Brick (June 9, 2011 (08:48am))

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Re: Anyone Want to Critique my Script?

Anyone want to read it?

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Re: Anyone Want to Critique my Script?

Sure. PM it to me.

EDIT: Wow. That was depressing.

Last edited by Golden (June 9, 2011 (09:10am))

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Re: Anyone Want to Critique my Script?

Forgive the noobish question but,
What is a "PM"?

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Re: Anyone Want to Critique my Script?

Lego9663 Studios wrote:

Forgive the noobish question but,
What is a "PM"?

Private Message.

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Re: Anyone Want to Critique my Script?

Thanks.

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Re: Anyone Want to Critique my Script?

Pm me if you want i'll read it

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Re: Anyone Want to Critique my Script?

I'd be interested in reading it.

Re: Anyone Want to Critique my Script?

PM me! What do you want me to critique in it?

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VanderFlame Studios wrote:

PM me! What do you want me to critique in it?

Story, and how I wrote the dialogue.  This is book to script.  Or short story to script so I want to see if you like how it was done.

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Re: Anyone Want to Critique my Script?

Critique sent. Interesting story.

Re: Anyone Want to Critique my Script?

PM meh?

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Re: Anyone Want to Critique my Script?

Shoot me a PM, please.

Re: Anyone Want to Critique my Script?

Okay, I think that's enough.  Thank you all for volunteering.
EDIT: Once I get back all reviews then I re-create the script and then another 5 people can read it.

Last edited by Binding Brick (June 9, 2011 (02:48pm))

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Living LEGO wrote:

Shoot me a PM, please.

Over here in Australia a "PM" is Prime Minster, the guy that rules the country, Living Lego, looks like the Feds will be coming after you....
AA

Re: Anyone Want to Critique my Script?

But, I'm living underneath your house, and using your wi-fi. They're gonna track me down to your house, AA mini/tongue

I'm half-way done with the script, btw. It's great! I'll send you a full review soon.

EDIT: Sent. I enjoyed it, just a couple of problems, but it's great.

Last edited by Living LEGO (June 10, 2011 (12:52pm))

Re: Anyone Want to Critique my Script?

I'd like to see it. PM me please.

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Re: Anyone Want to Critique my Script?

As would I.

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Re: Anyone Want to Critique my Script?

I would be interested in reading it.