Topic: RA:BW Intro

As I got the job of making the storyline for T.G-Toms Red Alert 3 mod, I made a script for an intro. Please tell me what you think of it.



RA:BW Intro



Scene 1 - Time Machine

Shot of outside the timemachine.

Shot of inside the time machine, followed by a shot of the General.

Technician: The Dicatator is on the line, General.

a screen turns on, and the Dictaotor is showing.

The Dictator: I want world domination at th end of the week, so be quick.

General: As you wish.

The Dictator:Oh, and when you get there, remember to send a postcard, not one of those with a landscape motive, but one with dogs. I like dogs.

screen turns black.

Technican: All systems ready, all troops locked and loaded. Starting counddown.

A voice counts slowly down from ten.

While so, several different shots are shown.

1:Close-ups on the general and the technicians.

2:Outside shots of the time machine, where small lightning strikes are erupting form the device.

3:The countown is over and we see the whole time machine is shaking

4:Inside shot of the cockpit, with the whole room shaking.

The ship dissappears in a flash.

Scene 2 - battle of knights and Pirates

first shot of the castle and the army protecting it.

Slide shot showing the front soldiers and the grand general in the front.

Soldier 1: Why do you think he's so mad.

Soldier 2: How should I know?

A pirate ship is approaching the army.

Shot onboard the deck ogf the ship.

A man is walkng to the captains office.

Pirate 1: We are ready for attack.

Close-up of the captain.

Captain: Fire.

Pirate 1: Fire what?

captain: I don't know. Fire those old fruits  we got.. They taste awful.

shot showing the cannons fire.

shots of the soldiers get hit.

Eventual: Soldiers gets shot out by the cannon and onto land.

scene 3 - The Kings throneroom

A soldier runs to the king, bows before him.
soldier 1: My king there's an army approaching us!

King: I know, the pirates, again.

Soldier 1: No, not that one. another one, with shining armor and strange weapons.

The king thinks.

King: Send as many soldiers as you can to the meet them. I want this castle to hold. My other one smells funny.

Soldier 1: Yes, my king.

The soldier runs out. Last shot of the king.

Fade to black

scene 4 - The invasion

A shot of a farmer trying to calm down a horse, but then sees the army approaching him, with the general in the front.

They begin to shoot.

Title

Fade to black.

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Wow, looks good.

Don't be fooled, my avatar is a facade of conformity.

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When did he ask you to write a script?
Anyways looks like a great story!

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Capedkid wrote:

When did he ask you to write a script?
Anyways looks like a great story!

well, since I alone was responsable for creaing a backstory, I could do pretty much whatever I wanted, as long as it included the 3 factions.

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That's cool.

You can do anything, just have fun while doing it.

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Well I think I'll give an edited version with actual units names like those guys who run to their king/captain is the scout, and on Moddb.com there's an model of the king. Still, I think that we need more than 1 guy animating this. Do any of you guys wants to do this?

''You don't have to tell him how great is coffee is man!''

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Well, if so, I wanna do the first and last scene, cause I have already begun making sets.

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Oh, it's a Lego mod? Cool.

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the frozen brick wrote:

Well, if so, I wanna do the first and last scene, cause I have already begun making sets.

Since your the guy who made the designs for that faction (the other 2 are my designs) you may do those factions. The other 2 are for someone else. Oh and I'm the guy who's doing the CGI between the brickfilm scenes in.

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DOUBLE POST OMGOSH

I posted this also on the moddb, those guys are looking it from another perspective, and I want to have a good script (it's already a good script, but those RA3 Nerds...)

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So you need someone to animate a scene ? I can help, but I'm working on my chase entry so I can start untill after the deadline mini/smile

I don't have a ship or castle in lego though so if frozenbrick is making scene 1 and four, I can do 3. If  you want

Last edited by Pillow (August 3, 2009 (10:15am))

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Good, but we still need voice-actors, also, remember that this needs to be really good quality, because this is for a game. That means a castle hall is grey, with grey bricks, not blue bricks because it looked more ''funny''. I'm not want to scare anyone, i'm just warn them mini/smile

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Alright, I could voice-act in the movie and I could ask some people to do some lines.
Now I just need to find grey bricks. mini/bigsmile
My camera has gives good qualitypicture so that's not a problem mini/smile

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T.G-Tom is it ok the grey walls are made out of these parts: http://www.bricklink.com/search.asp?col … itemID=701
Since I don't have any white bricks I'm trying to get some te cheapest way possible, so if a friend of mine doesn't have any grey bricks I'll probably buy some since I need them anyway.. mini/smile

Edit: Never mind, I asked a friend of mine he had some (light)grey bricks mini/smile

Last edited by Pillow (August 14, 2009 (11:12am))

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I could probably, and happily do the 2nd scene if nescessary. I could quite easily create a castle (with grey walls mini/delirium ), as I have enough bricks, and possibly a ship. Also, if DoubleVstudios isn't doing the 3rd scene, I could easily do that aswell.

And, pirates attacking a castle, surely that's a mix of 2 completely different eras, or is it meant to be that way?

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I'm doing the 3rd scene CheesyBricks mini/smile
My friend had a whole bunch of Grey bricks mini/lol

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That's why I said:

CheeseyBricks wrote:

...Also, if DoubleVstudios isn't doing the...