LarryStudios wrote:The animation is somewhat average, maybe even a little below average, there's also light flicker which I hope will be fixed in the future HOWEVER despite my critique I'd like to point out that I really liked the humor in the video and it certainly was enjoyable to watch it. So if you keep on practicing and making your animation better + keep on writing that funnily this show's gonna be a blast!
Thanks for an honest critique. I also am aware of the light variance, but do not know any techniques to minimize or eliminate it. I'd love to hear advice on this from more experienced animators, as I am new to Lego animation (and to Bricks In Motion... I'm sure I'll find some answers as I explore this site.)
You also mentioned the animation quality is lacking. I did use a low frame rate (10 FPS), and, I learned a few things to avoid by mistakes that are apparent in the first 2 minutes (the background changing through the windows, he phantom motion of antenna and chair). But I did try to pay attention to the details. For instance, often times, when Melissa turns her head, her hair moves more slowly, and snaps back after she stops moving her head, to make her air look less stiff. If my animation is sub-par, I'd really love some specific areas where the animation can be improved, so that I can make the best cartoon possible.
I'm most impressed, LarryStudios, that you really enjoyed the humor! I find the writing the most difficult part of the entire process, and if I made you laugh, then I know that my writing efforts are in the right direction. I do hope to write "Holding Our Own" as character-based comedy, with the characters becoming richly-developed as the series progresses. Thanks again for the critique, as I will use it to improve my work.
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