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1 Topic by Legoyeah01 June 3, 2014 (09:39am)

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Topic: James cameron Spider-Man script.

So we could talk about other films here? Right? So I found James Cameron spider-man scriptment and it looks pretty weird I read some of it.. heres some of the scriptment.
8/4/1993
S P I D E R - M A N
Written by
Barry Cohen and Ted Newson
and
James Cameron
2nd Revision by
Joseph Goldmari and James Cameron
and
John Brancato
--------
Third Revision by James Cameron
based on screenplays by Ted Newsom & John Brancato,
Barney Cohen and Joseph Goldman
SECOND REV.
7/29/1993
FADE IN:
INT. PROFESSOR OCK"S PRIVATE PHYSICS LABORATORY, THE
CYCLOTRON ROOM (CREDIT SEQUENCE) - DAY
A mighty WARNING KLAXON assaults our ears. A FLASHING RED
WARNING LIGHT stabs our eyes.
Several DIALS go into the RED. A hand pushes aside a
YELLOW THERMOS and pushes forward a RED POWER THROTTLE.
We hear the WHINING UP of a cyclotron. A DIGITAL DIAL
climbs to "5% POWER." A SPIDER crawls across a DIAL.
Begin OPENING CREDITS.
THE CYCLOTRON ROOM is in an old basement full of peeling
paint and plumbing wrapped with TAPE. Leaks are here and
there. COBWEBS are all around.
DOCTOR OTTO OCTAVIUS (OCK) is a strong but strange
featured man in his mid-fifties.
His assistant, WEINER, hovers nearby looking on. He's
open mouthed with a mindless kind of curiosity. WEINER is
a local, small-time hood hired by OCK to circumvent the
school administration and to "procure" whatever OCK needs
for his experiments. He shades his eyes against a searing
BLUE-WHITE BEAM that erupts from the WINDOW. THE ROOM IS
DIVIDED INTO A CONTROL ROOM AND THE EXPERIMENT CHAMBERS.
WEINER
Whoa, whoa, whoa... what's that?
With a WHOOSH, the WINDOW EXPLODES, showering the TWO with
shards of GLASS, and throwing them to the floor.
OCK
(rising)
We begin again... let's kick in that new
transducer. See if we can double the
power output.
WEINER
(rising more slowly)
Whoa, Doc... wait a minute...
But OCK is already at the THROTTLE. The cyclotron whirls
up. The lights go on. Louder, brighter than before. OCK
looks through the broken WINDOW into the EXPERIMENTAL
CHAMBER. The POWER DIAL inches upward, "eight, nine..."
the BLUE-WHITE LIGHT is blinding now. The WHINE pitch is
shattering.
END OPENING CREDITS.
OCK
Okey... dokey!
The POWER DIAL hits ten.
EXT. EMPIRE STATE UNIVERSITY - DAY
As STUDENTS go to class, the sound of the cyclotron spills
out of the SCIENCE CENTER onto the grounds of Empire State
University.
We see PETER PARKER, a pleasant faced senior who's among
the top in his class. Sincere and serious, he has yet to
develop a way with women.
LIZ
(falling in step)
Hiya Peter...
LIZ ALLEN is also a senior. She's beautiful and
intelligent.
PETER
(ardent but
uncomfortable)
Hiya Liz... how're you doing...?
LIZ
(teasing softly)
How'm I doing what?
HARRY
Peter! Peter! Wait up!
HARRY is the school nerd. A quirky kid who, like PETER,
can be a little backward around girls, especially pretty
ones like Liz.
HARRY
(to Liz)
Would you, uh... excuse us for a minute?
Despite PETER'S protesting body language, HARRY pulls him
away like a conspirator.
PETER
What is it? what...
HARRY
Did the Astro-Physics Journal really
accept your paper?
PETER
(laughs, embarrassed)
Yeah... well... all I got's the data but
they've agreed to publish it when it's
finished. You know... it's my
calculation on the Planetary Conjunction.
HARRY
And its influence on the anti-force.
Isn't it?
PETER
Yes. Look, Harry, I am busy with...
(indicates Liz standing
there)
HARRY
Yeah, you and the rest of the class.
Every one is busy with Liz.
LIZ
(growing impatient)
Peter?
A HAND reaches in and smacks her bottom.
FLASH
Hiya, cupcakes...
LIZ
(elbowing him
affectionately)
Flash...!
They kiss and walk away.
HARRY
(sneering)
And Flash is the busiest of them all...
PETER
(disappointed)
Come on, Harry... we'll be late for
Octavius.
HARRY makes a gesture dismissing OCK as crazy.
HARRY
Ock is nuts, don't you agree?
PETER
Ock is a genius, Harry. Crazy, Yes! But,
a genius misunderstood, and unappreciated.
INT. CYCLOTRON AREA HALLWAY - DAY
It is a basement hallway full of LOCKERS which STUDENTS
are banging open and shut as they put stuff in and take
stuff out. In their midst, a MAN is banging on the door
marked "Cyclotron Room - Authorized Personnel Only!"
Professor ROSOMORF, SIXTISH, respectable, a good old
fashioned professor, he's the head of the Physics Dept.
With him is ALEXANDER THORKEL, a 40-ish, Waspish school
administrator. For a scientist as crazily focused as OCK,
THORKEL is a natural enemy.
ROZ
(knocking furiously)
Doctor Octavius! You are late for your
lecture. The students are waiting.
Doctor Octavius!
THORKEL
Your friend is impossible Professor
Rosomorf, I told the board we should let
him go.
The LIGHT above THORKEL's head EXPLODES. Then all the
LIGHTS behind him EXPLODE in succession. THORKEL and ROZ
look amazed...
THORKEL
What's he doing in there, not his crazy
experiment again.
ROZ
You mean his anti-force theory... one day
they'll give him the Nobel Prize for it.
THORKEL
Meanwhile he is demolishing our
university. Octavius!!
(knocks)
Open the door.
INT. OCK'S LAB
OCK
The anti-force experiment has now reached
the limit of electronic overload safety.
Therefore, Weiner, you will disconnect
the overload safety device.

I just want you guys to see how it is. Post your thoughts on it.

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2 Reply by HoldingOurOwn June 4, 2014 (06:52am)

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Re: James cameron Spider-Man script.

I don't know if it is really by Cameron or not. It's pretty amateur writing so if it really is Cameron, it fits right in with his other writing. If it's a clever forgery, it is very clever because it's intentionally like that!

Examples:

1) A mighty WARNING KLAXON assaults our ears. A FLASHING RED
WARNING LIGHT stabs our eyes.

This is breaking the fourth wall. The audience is in the script for some reason. Some scripts may say, "We see an escaped lion running the streets" instead of just, "an escaped lion is running the streets," it's not suggested but still seen in screenplays, but I've never seen anything like this before.

2) LIZ ALLEN is also a senior. She's beautiful and
intelligent.

Beauty is subjective. But how do you film someone being intrinsticly intelligent?!! Put in the script dialogue that lets the audience judge her as intelligent. In the classic Transformers G1 animated series, Perceptor speaks in techno jargon and large, obscure words. Never in the scripts does it say, "He's intelligent." We're shown that he is.

3) WEINER is
a local, small-time hood hired by OCK to circumvent the
school administration and to "procure" whatever OCK needs
for his experiments.

Again, how does someone film all this? it's a lot of padded script. His actions will reveal who he is, or seems to be.

4) The use of Caps for names every time they appear in narration. When not identifying dialogue, the name should only be in caps once per scene, the first time it appears.

5) There are some grammar errors, too, which makes me think it's not really his script. But I may be giving him too much credit...

6) Anyway, there is not a lot of storyline to critique. It actually looks like a good beginning to an interesting take. But it would need good character development and light-hearted humor, which is important to Spiderman. If Cameron went ahead with this, expect the character development to be absent.

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3 Reply by jampot June 4, 2014 (07:21am)

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Re: James cameron Spider-Man script.

James Cameron was set to write and direct a Spider-man movie, but the studio rejected his script as it was too adult, featuring too many expletives and having two sex scenes between Pete and Mary Jane. They deemed that it was not appropriate for their target audience, which is correct.

I have no idea whether this is part of the actual script or not, but I do know that the script exists somewhere as James Cameron has confirmed it time and again. Empire mentions it every time they have big article on a new Spider-man movie, too.

HOO, you make some interesting points, but I hope you don't mind if I point out a few things about scriptwriting.

HoldingOurOwn wrote:

1) A mighty WARNING KLAXON assaults our ears. A FLASHING RED
WARNING LIGHT stabs our eyes.
This is breaking the fourth wall. The audience is in the script for some reason. Some scripts may say, "We see an escaped lion running the streets" instead of just, "an escaped lion is running the streets," it's not suggested but still seen in screenplays, but I've never seen anything like this before.

At no point is the audience in the script, but the audience is absolutely part of the film. The audience is part of every film. Yes, an escaped lion may well be running the streets, but just simply putting that in a script doesn't tell anyone reading it whether the audience is going to see the lion, or whether they will hear it, and it doesn't give any description of the lion either. This use of the plural 1st person is not uncommon. Where this script has "A mighty WARNING KLAXON assaults our ears", it's telling the Sound department that the sound of the klaxon needs to be loud, jarring, and perhaps uncomfortable to hear. Similar, the warning light needs to be shot to be bright and to fragment the rest of the frame.

If you read any of Christopher Nolan's scripts, whenever there is a stark cut, he writes it as "We cut to-". Using the plural 1st person is common in scriptwriting.

HoldingOurOwn wrote:

2) LIZ ALLEN is also a senior. She's beautiful and
intelligent.
Beauty is subjective. But how do you film someone being intrinsticly intelligent?!! Put in the script dialogue that lets the audience judge her as intelligent. In the classic Transformers G1 animated series, Perceptor speaks in techno jargon and large, obscure words. Never in the scripts does it say, "He's intelligent." We're shown that he is.

In a lot of early development script treatments, such as the one Cameron wrote (whether this is it or not is debatable) screenwriters choose to put a little bit of character info on a character when they first appear. Also, Hollywood has an unspoken scale for traditional, mainstream beauty. The concept of beauty may be subjective, but Hollywood beauty is not. It's extremely overbearing and ageist.

I'd also like to point out that every Tarantino script is hilariously amatueristic in style, but that doesn't reflect on any of his work as bad films. I would give you an example but most of his best scriptwork (from what I have read that has been made public) is written as if of the top of his head. It's also unrepeatable but what did ya expect from him?

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