Topic: The 182nd Legion: The Attack

The 182nd: The Attack


Scene: Scrolling Credits

War! The Galactic Republic, fighting on numerous fronts, has it's troops spread thin. The casualties rise as attacks from the Separatists grow more frequent. With Tatooine becoming a key planet in the war due to it's hyperspace lanes, it has come under intense fighting. The 182nd, some of the most elite troops in the Republic, has come to aid the troops on Tatooine, defending an outpost in the Dune Sea.

Scene 1: Republic Star Cruiser heads into atmosphere.

Scene 2: The two ARC trooper's and the ARF's.

Crack: Sir why are we here because I am particularly bored and I wanna go home and drink soda.
Scorch: We're here to help these idiots here at the outpost 
Croc: So we're here cause a couple troops can't shoot straight?
Scorch: Bingo!

Scene 3: The clones inside the outpost.

Knack: Sir why are am I waiting here because I am particularly bored and I wanna
Knick: Shut up...
Knack: You shut up!
Boss: (Shoots in between the two). Will you two shut up!

A knock is heard at the door.

Wolf: Is that the pizza?

ARC trooper's Scorch & Sev with ARF troopers Crack and Croc walk in.

Sev: No it's not
Wolf: Did you bring soda?
Crack: Yep! (holds soda can up)

Scorch stares at Crack angrily, causing Crack to put the soda can down.

Boss: Welcome to the outpost guys!

Scorch: Save the hello's for later, how is our situation on the droids and their position.
Boss: Take a look for yourself!
Sev: (looks out the window). I Don't see anythin...WOAH!

Scene 4: A Battle Droid squad.

Back to Scene 3

Sev: Why wasn't anyone on lookout!
Knick: We were waiting for the pizza...

Another knock is heard at the door.

Wolf: That must me it! (Runs to the door).
Wolf: (Answers door)
Battle Droid: Droid Pizza Delivery!

Sev shoot's the droid.

Sev: Get the ARF's on the roof, we must defend the base!

Back to Scene 4

Commando Droid: Sir, we are ready to attack.
Savage Opress: Good, begin the assault.

Scene 5: The ARF troopers on the roof.

Croc: Sir! We are in position to take out the Sith, should we take the shot?
Boss: Wait a sec, let's think this through.
Savage Opress: Let's take out these idiot clones, dog's will gnaw on their bones!
Boss: Blow his freaking head off!
Croc: (shoots and misses)
Croc: Did I mention that Crack was the sniper?
Savage Opress: Open fire!

Scene 5

Scorch: We are taking heavy hits!
Sev: Thanks for stating the obvious Scorch!
Scorch: Get out of my face!
Boss: (Fires in between the two). Calm down! I have a plan to get us out of here.
Knack: Not that one! It'll never work, we will get killed for sure!
Knick: Not if we use these rocket launchers as a distraction.
Sev: What is this plan anyway?
Boss: Well, whenever these guys aren't killing themselves, I worked on a small transport ship. We can use it to get to get out of here.
Knack: And where are we going?
Boss: There's an abandon outpost nearby, similar to this one, we can get there and contact the Republic.
Scorch: Oh yeah, they made tons of these outposts!
Knick: Alright, lets move!
Boss: Crack, do you read me?

Scene 6

Crack: (Blaster shots in background) Loud and clear sir!
Boss: We are getting out of here!
Croc: Are you using that junk pile right next to us?

Scene shows the craft in expanded shot.

Boss: (Over radio) Yep!
Wolf: Alright, I’ll fly it down to the door, we will pick you guys up
Boss: Great, before you do fire a couple rockets at the droid transport, just to get em a bit nervous
Croc: Already ahead of you! (Fires rocket, disabling transport)
Wolf: Okay let's move!

Ship takes off

Boss: Okay everyone let's go go go!

Everyone rushes to door.

Wolf lands ship

Commando Droid: Hey! There escaping! Blast 'em!
Other Droids: Roger Roger!

Sev: This is the ship? It's a hunk of junk!
Boss: It ain't pretty, but it flies! Now everyone get on or we're all dead!

Ship shows everyone on board, and then taking off.

Commando droid: Sir, the clones got away.
Savage Opress: (Places droid in Force Choke) You have failed me for the last time droid. (Destroys droid)

Final Scene shows ship flying into distance.

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Not bad, the jokes are nice, and adding pizza to anything will make it good. mini/tongue


Not that I mind, but some people might complain that it's not formated "professionaly".
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lol, thanks

I actually write these things so that i could read em, since i work alone. Never paid attention to "formality"

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I like Star Wars films, but don't make it too funny, it's not good then too. mini/wink No too serious, no too funny. In the middle of them. mini/smile

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Nice film, but I'd read this for the next script you write mini/bigsmile  http://www.bricksinmotion.com/forums/to … creenplay/

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I think I might be the only one who isn't a fan of the script. It seems to me like it's just another overused Star Wars: Clone Wars film. There wasn't anything that I found creative in the script and it looks like something I would find on YouTube.

As for your camera, you should not film at all until you get a new camera. Yes, I can understand filming with the camera you have, but you also have to distribute your funds wisely. You can't be spending all your money on LEGO unless you have everything besides LEGO, and vice-versa. You're going to have to make some sacrifices, and you might have to sacrifice some $10s of $100s of dollars from LEGO to tech things (The role could be switched around at any time, however).

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I'm not gonna judge your script until I see the final movie... But good luck anyway mini/smile
Just a few questions: how are you gonna recreate Tatooine? And what about the vessel animations?

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vessel animations were gonna be bassically me cropping gunships and things, then slowly moving it, similiar to brickfilming, but i might redo those scenes into cgi, since i have the software to do so

as for tatooine, i was gonna use this http://www.smythstoys.com/product_images/109108_M.jpg


And juggernaut, i understand your position, and i love your feedback

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You're using MegaBlocks????? mini/twitch Then it's not a real brickfilm! Brickfilms should be made using LEGOs!

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md2a wrote:

You're using MegaBlocks????? mini/twitch Then it's not a real brickfilm! Brickfilms should be made using LEGOs!

BIM wrote:

brickfilms or LEGO movies, are created using LEGO® and other plastic brick building toys.

Please, don't bash people for using other items that are similar to LEGO but aren't.

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meh, i'm sure he was just joking

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Juggernaut Pictures wrote:
md2a wrote:

You're using MegaBlocks????? mini/twitch Then it's not a real brickfilm! Brickfilms should be made using LEGOs!

BIM wrote:

brickfilms or LEGO movies, are created using LEGO® and other plastic brick building toys.

Please, don't bash people for using other items that are similar to LEGO but aren't.

Sorry but LEGOs are the original bricks. All other brands are cheap, low-quality copies. That's a fact. And I don't agree with your definition of a brickfilm... mini/no

I personally would never use other bricks than LEGOs to shoot a brickfilm. But of course my comment was sarcastic, if people want to use other bricks they have the right to.  mini/wink  Still, LEGOs are superior to other bricks (not only in terms of quality, but also if you consider the variety of shapes and colors)

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md2a wrote:

Sorry but LEGOs are the original bricks. All other brands are cheap, low-quality copies. That's a fact. And I don't agree with your definition of a brickfilm... mini/no

My definition is also this website's definition. So if your film is made with Mega-Bloks, Kre-O or any other similar building toy that isn't LEGO, it isn't a brickfilm? It'd be a darn shame if this film, which consists of Mega-Bloks, is not considered a brickfilm.

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