here is a story i've been working on. It's set in the medieval period. (it's not finished yet)

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1.  CARLOS LOCKSMITH SHOP – NIGHT
Carlo is asleep when a noise wakes him up he looks out of the    window he see’s a gang of thieves stealing he accidently steps on his cat the cat runs of and the gang see him one of the gang runs at him to kill him they fight in a blacksmith shop as he’s about to get killed Volric [the leader] say’s “don’t I have an idea” then Carlo is knocked out. Cut to…

2.  CARLOS SHOP – DAY
He wakes up with the constable next to him and lots of stolen goods as well the constable say’s “your under arrest boy” [he got framed by the gang] cut to…

3.  JAIL – DAY
He gets chucked in a cell the guard say’s in a sneer “enjoy you’re hanging tomorrow” There’s another person in the cell they talk the other person Edgar say’s “you’ll never escape Carlo say’s “no I have a idea” the guard came’s to check the cell’s when he gets to Carlos cell theirs no one in there or so he thinks he go’s in to look and Carlo jumps down on him but they aren’t out yet they’ve still got to get out of the castle luckily Carlo is a locksmith and he can pick locks they escape. Cut to…

4. AN OLD SHED – EVENING
Carlo and Edgar hide for the night.                                   
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5. A VILLAGE STREET – NIGHT
Someone is talking to one of the gang money changes hands and the gang member say’s “it’s a deal” cut to…

6. THE OLD SHED – MORNING
Carlo see’s one of the gang and they follow him. He heads back to his base they decide to sneak in Carlo finds I plans of their next robbery [it is the next night] Carlo has a filling it was to easy but Edgar say’s it wasn’t. Cut to…

7. THE PLANNED ROBBERY SITE – DAY
It’s a hot day and Carlos getting thirsty so he risks it and go’s to get a beer even when Edgar protests unluckily someone recognises him from a wanted sign and tells the constable. Cut to…
   
8. THE PLANNED ROBBERY SITE – EVENING
the gang turn up and head straight for them Carlo realises to late that it’s a trap the gang surround them Carlo finds out that Edgar betrayed him for $$$ Carlo say’s “you’ll be court for this” the gang just laugh and tell him that they will never be court for framing him but the constable and men are their because he was about to arrest Carlo and Edgar but the gang came so he heard everything and he jumps out to arrest the gang and Edgar but the gang is to good and beat the constable so Carlo does something amazing to catch them. Fade out…

any criticism welcome.