Well I plan to make this an hour 1/2 movie maybe even more, I would hate it for all my work to be gone.

Heheh, that's because I don't put mine online, but I do copyright them.

You know it's free? If you have proof that you made it, then anyone else who copies it can be punished by law. (However unlikely)

Lol no to copyright it I went to this site, http://www.copyright.gov/eco/, I wrote alot, and it is possible for the car scene to have it inside the car while driving you only make the front half of the car and the back half separately, And the car I am using is not a custom, it comes in one of those small boxes for about 7 Dollars. But the car looks modern, which is why I got it. It's basically an actual movie but with lego. But Lol, No one has answered what do you think of the script?

You want us to tell you what we think of the script? Be careful what you wish for. If you just want people to tell you it's great, don't bother reading this. Consider yourself warned.

Scene by scene:

1. (in car): Not sure the point of this scene. It doesn't set up any necessary situation, and while it kind of gets across the idea of some friction between the child and father, that could easily be done in the next scene. And the lack of character descriptions (for example, how old the kid is or even his gender) is a big misstep... you know what you're thinking of, but the reader doesn't.

2. (with TV): The father/kid friction's here as well, further making the first scene unnecessary. Both characters sound exactly the same... you should be able to present most lines without listing who said it and the reader be able to figure it out. And no anchor would be as generic as to say "another world leader." Give a name. And for that matter, it would make more sense to me if the anchor was the one who brought up about it being the "fifth one that week."

3. (finding paper): The bad guys let a piece of paper with some of their info get blown out of their car? And they don't notice it fast enough to immediately stop and get it, but do notice it fast enough for them to know who ends up with it? There has to be a better way for this kid to get mixed up in things.

4. (Gregg's): Again, lack of character description is critical. Is this Gregg guy an older, Doc Brown-type character? Or a young, uber-nerdy friend? Same issue with identical character voices. Unless the paralysis cure becomes important later in the script, you don't need to go into detail about it here. And neutrons are sub-atomic particles. I think you were looking for "neuron."

5. (following): I already pointed out the implausibility of the bad guys finding the kid in the first place, but also, I'm a little confused why they went straight to the creepy stalker thing instead of first playing nice ("Hey, excuse me, something blew out of my car, you wouldn't happen to know where it is?"). But I'm willing to grant you both of these concessions as dramatic license.

It's not a bad start, but it's typical for a younger writer... and typical for a younger writer simply won't hold a viewer's attention for over an hour no matter how good the visuals are. The pieces are there for a solid story, but how you're telling it needs work. Make your characters more distinctive, streamline things where necessary, and show things a bit more instead of having your characters talk about everything... film is a visual medium. Do yourself a favor and download Celtx as well. Using proper format goes a lot farther than you realize. And lastly, start using proper punctuation--the missing commas, question marks, and extra apostrophes everywhere scream "young writer" more than anything else.

Good luck. For a project this ambitious, you'll need it.