Right. Pretty much I want to make an actual video for the first time, and I'm starting off with a medieval comedy. But personally, I think that the script needs a bit of work, especially near the end.
Feel free to post ideas or revisions to make this funnier and better.

Imagine a British comedy, and using the Legos from the old Knights Kingdom sets (the bad guys- Vladek's army).

In the dungeons, all of the army are lined up, ax's held up straight, everyone looking foward.
The King comes walking by.
King:  "Now, being in this castle will be a terrible experience, but if you do as i say, there might be the slimmest, tinniest, most miniscule chance that you'll survive. But if i see one nose hair out of line, what you'll go through will be worse than death itself. Might i add that you are completely daft to try to defy my rules in anyway, and that if such a thing happens, it will be my pleasure to squeeze all the life out of your sorry soul. In this castle all the rules shall be obeyed, and if i say you need to go out there on the front lines and die, you shall do that! Do you understand? Right now lets begin this inspection and you better hope i don't see a single thing wrong or you won't be leaving this dungeon anytime soon. Now, let's see... good, good, better, good, shave that beard, good, great, clean that armor, good, better, good... gasp... you little piece of grimy dirt! What do you think you're doing, holding that on the wrong hand?"
Soldier:  "But sir, i- i- im a lefty, i swear, last inspection i asked you if it was okay-"
King:  "Quiet you filthy gasbag, you ugly swine! i don't remember ever having such a discussion-"
Soldier:  "But that's not exactly my fault, now is it-"
King:  "Talking out of turn, now are we, you halfbrained nit wit, you fat-bottomed slime, you deserve the worst of my punishments-"
Soldier:  "But its just the way i hold it, whats wrong with that?"
King:  "I'll show you what's wrong with that."
So the King blasts him with his magical sorcerers staff, leaving nothing behind but a standing skeleton.
King:  "OFF WITH HIS HEAD!"
Soldier 2:  "But sir, he already dead."
King:  (ignorantly) "No he isn't- he deserves more painful punishments-"
Soldier 3:  "But sir, look at him, he hasn't got any brains left in him-"
King:  "No, no, he needs to be punished-"
Soldier 2:  "My lord, he can't possibly still be alive, look at him, he's just a bunch of" (Soldier pushes the skeleton, which crumbles) "dead bones."
King:  "You dare speak against me?"
Soldier 2:  "No, of course not-"
The King screams with rage and starts blasting soldiers left and right with his staff.
King:  "This is what I think of you, and you aaand you were with him, weren't you?!!"

In the castle of the "good" knights, all the men are sitting around a fire.
Knight 1:  "...So I see him kill them one after the other, saying things like 'unloyal maggots' and 'you all deserve to die!'"
The knights all laugh.
Knight 2:  "Seriously, if he keeps this up, he'll just be killing his men for us!"
Knight 3:  "Yeah, the idiot."

The ending with the angry king may need a bit of revision. So help me here, guys, I want to get started, but I'm held up by the script problems. Post any ideas.

Thanks!

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