I'll just keep my mouth shut and go forward, I will keep all your comments in mind.  My shot is really rough I won't argue that.  But I still like my shot and I felt my rusty skills would help accentuate the energy I was going for in the shot.  I like my art and wanted to explain where I am coming from so maybe others can enjoy it.

I Got a good clean simple shot in mind for the space challenge.  I have been messing a bit with blue screening a bit and will try and get something posted tonight.

Last edited by PJ_pund (February 9, 2010 (09:39pm))

Any better?  The camera angle is plain I know but a less cluttered shot.

Oh, goblins got my green screen and the bogey man is bogartin' the blue screen.  I'll have to make or get one.  Haven't done it in a while, but I want to try it again.

Filmyguy, I like your entry but what's with the banana peel effect on the legs?

Bahahahaha! For some reason I just found that really funny. Seriously, I went back and looked at Ark11's entry and then laughed at this for about 5 minutes straight.

Anyway, on more serious note, the discussion on PJ_pund's style. The problem with his other shots was not that they were cluttered. The problem was that the way the clutter was positioned and the way they were shot made the shots very hard to "read", by which I mean it was hard to figure out what was going on. If an audience can't tell visually what is happening then it be annoying to them which means they can become bored or disinterested.

As for your current frame, the background is the first thing that bugs me, because it looks like a flat backdrop, not the wide empty expanse of space. the framing's not too bad, but there's a problem with the way your eye moves around the shot. It may be different in the context of the other shots that would come before and after it in an actual film, but as it is your eye is drawn first to the yellow astronaut (mainly because he's the biggest point of contrast in the shot), whose movement and eyeline draw towards the black astronaut, who's movement an eyeline force your eyes out the side of the image, meaning that it takes more effort to pull your eyes back into the picture. The light is a bit strong too. Try using tissue paper or something as a filter to dissipate the light and make it a bit softer.

And filmyguy, I'm not sure what you're trying to portray, but the shot itself is not too bad, I might have put the camera a little higher, but that's just me. My big problem with the shot is that it's abstract for no apparent reason. Call me shallow, but a scared guy sitting in a white expanse does not say "in space" to me. I know you did something similar with an astronaut in one of your films (I believe it was your S.T.A.R. entry, but it's late here and I'm too tired to check), but without that context the shot makes very little sense.

Sorry for the rant, I know I can get a bit nitpicky with certain things but I mean it as a friendly critique. If no one ever points out certain problems, how can you know how to fix them?

-Kimothy

Again with the excuses.

You're just making weird entry's to win do you?
Sorry, but it doesn't look any good

Why do you have to explain anything? It's cinematography, we don't need to know why you used it. The mask is pretty good.

These two terms both mean the same thing.

You're right. The best way to do so is to take the criticism and learn from it rather than continuing to argue about it.
- Aaron

edited this to look cooler

-Jimmybob

Thanks Spudster.  I will continue to work on lighting and backdrops.  A better camera is on my list of things to get. 

Jimmybob- a bit grainy but I really like the silhouette contrast