Sounds interesting... but as Noodle said, it doesn't make sense to really have this thread unless you have already at least written one draft of a script.

That would be cool.

Will do...

:shifty: Thanks. Hope you like It! I think the movie will be about 3-5 minutes long depending on how much time I have.

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That's....really short for 3-5 minutes....I am currently about to film a movie around 5-8 minutes, and the script is 10 pages long. Also, you use "I" a lot, when it should be "I'm" or "I am"....

Other than the supposed length, and a few grammar errors, it looks alright. Except, it seems a bit simple too.

Well, you still should script out the fights/shootouts. Here is a quick excerpt from my upcoming film, to show you how I did a fight scene

Matthew awakens in a forested area, lying face down. He gets up and slumps against a tree. He starts to cry, but then sharply inhales as a twig cracks. He looks around the corner, and one of the henchmen is coming. He holds his breath as he quickly jolts back behind the tree, and the henchmen yells "hey!" Rustling of leaves and twigs are heard as the henchman runs toward the tree. He looks at the tree and no one is there. From around the back of the tree, Matthew comes out with a large branch and hits the henchmen over the head with it. The henchman falls limply over with a single strike and Matthew pants deeply, and falls to the ground beside the henchman. He searches him and finds a knife, a small sword, and a pistol. Matthew gasps as he lifts the pistol up, clutching it above his head with two hands, like some sort of idol to him. He gets up and puts the knife and the sword away. He holds the pistol and looks around. Matthew sees a distant building up ahead, and gives a sly grunt. He begins walking towards the building, and as he comes closer to it, he notices guards standing at the entrance. He brandishes the gun and cocks it. After a moment, Matthew raises the gun and fires once. One of the guards falls to the ground, moaning and groaning in pain. Matthew chuckles, and fires again, this time missing the guard who is trying to aid his downed ally. The guard then notices him and begins to run towards Matthew. Matthew fires twice, both missing. He grunts and sighs heavily, then fires 2 more times. Both miss again, and the guard is coming towards him quickly. Matthew attempts to fire again, but the gun runs empty. The guard is now about 8 studs away, and Matthew begins breathing heavily. The guard is now arms length away, and tries to punch Matthew, over and over. Matthew dodges 3 punches (torso) and is hit with the fourth(HEADSHOT). The guard chuckles and goes for another strike. Matthew, without thinking, punches him back, and begins pounding on the guard. Both of them struggling on the ground now, Matthew  grabs a stone  and hits the guard over the head with it. The guard begins to bleed, and goes limp and unconscious. Matthew gets up, breathing heavily still, and begins running towards the building. He is inches away from the door when a huge man steps out in front of him. The man laughs in a deep voice and brandishes a Gigantic sword, glistening in the sunlight. Matthew begins to back up, and than trips over a rock, or something of the like. Just as the huge man is about to deliver a killing strike to Matthew, Matthew rolls over, and the sword hits the ground with great impact. Matthew jumps up and takes out  his own sword. The huge man attempts to strike again, and Matthew blocks it this time. Thinking quickly, Matthew severs one of the mans calves, and the man keels over in pain. Falling to the ground. Matthew is still panting deeply, as the huge man groans and writhes in pain.

What about all that "ruling the world" stuff? Plus,it just goes from the cop talking on the radio, to him killing the bad guys. How does he find out? What does he do to get them?

I know you didn't add alot of detail to this one, but I think you need more than 1-2 lines more.

Thanks for the advice guys.
I will take your advice into consideration as I write another rough draft. This might take 2-3 days because this one will be longer. But still comment and give ideas for the storyline.

If ya'll want me to I can post snipets (parts of the rough draft)over the next few days.

It's not what we want, it's whether or not you want help.

Actually, that script would last 3-5 minutes if properly executed, as it's mostly action. The lack of proper formatting makes it seem a lot shorter than it is. That said, there isn't really anything there except random violence. There's no motivation given for any of the characters. What are the bad guys planning? Why do they start shooting civilians? Right now, that script is a scene, not a story. It's a good start, but you've got to lay in a few more of the puzzle pieces to get an interesting film out of it.