Leonardo Horden is an owner of a Computer company. Who has revolutionized the world by creating the most efficient multi-tasker ever made, The Persona-NK17. Made to serve a variety of uses, from a servant, to a soldier. But in this case, the worlds largest and collective police force is run by the Persona-NK17. When his wife is searching through the computer out of boredom, she accidentally finds a ghost folder holding a WAV file, she plays it... nothing but what sounds like a dial tone, when the truth is that the Persona plan to enslave the human race. When the wife shows the file to Horden, he deciphers it and realizes what will be set in motion. He returns fro work and finds his wife murdered, and is framed by the Persona Police Force for third degree murder. He is imprisoned and is forced to work in backbreaking conditions. Until... he escapes...

How does this sound? I'd love some feedback.

That sounds awesome, what I was planning on was that he dies at the end. Giving an.. Oh... damn.. sort of reaction. Also, I forgot to mention, the title was: The Man With The Flowers because he goes home with some flowers as a gift... sees his wife... gets imprisoned then he keeps the flowers for ages.

The script, if anyone wants to read it.

Last edited by Lamplight (November 30, 2010 (09:19pm))

I have three words.

Jekyll and Hyde.

well, i had an idea last night: guy gets fired, his former boss recommends another job. he's hired- works for the C.O.A.W. (center of trained warfare) they dress in uniforms (this case episode 3 clone costumes) and they kill bad guys- but this is a action packed drama film, so some friends must die while in war. anyways- i created a small script:
Scene one: Johnson is at the police station

Suitcase slams shut. he pulls it off the table, and into his hand.he starts to walk away, out of the station. Then his narration starts, while a flashback happens.

*******************Flash Back********************

Narration:(is at his computer typing)I was in the middle of filing a report for the crime which had just happened on main street when i was called into the boss's office. Just then i new what was going to happen. Randy was laid off just last week- And Mike the week before.

Boss: hey Johnson- would you come in here for a second?

Narration: I didn't respond, i silently got up out of my seat and walked to his office. (does as he says)

The door closes behind him as he walks into the office. The camera gently moves forward onto the office door.

The Scene changes- but not dramatically (goes into his office)

Boss: Look son, i don't want to do this, but the -

Johnson: yep, I know. It happened last week and the week before that.

silence for a while. then the boss finally breaks in.

Boss: i need you to hand over your gun.

Johnson: Mmhhmm... (hands over his gun)

**************Flash Back************

Narration: he handed me a pan flit to a new recruitment center, which all seemed too new and fake.

he walks down the street, and while he walks down the street. his narration continues.

Narration: tomorrow is a new day. A New job. A new life.

The scene fades out to white.

Scene two: The new Center of armed warfare

he's walking down the hall of the center. dressed in his new uniform, though he does not have his helmet on.

Someone calls: (the new boss: Jackson) hey Rookie, over here!

johnson turns around, facing his new boss.

Jackson: welcome to the C.O.A.W. also known as the 'Center of Armed Warfare.' (they shake hands) This will be your trainer, Roy Stevenson. (introduces other man.) he will be your guide throughout the year.

Roy: hello, I'm Roy. Shall we get started?

Johnson: Sure. (the walk away from the boss)

Roy: so... how many questions do you have?

Johnson: well for starters: what's with the colorful sleeves?

Roy: Ranks. each person earns ranks. The darker the color of their sleeve, the higher the rank they have- and we are just about to approach the starting of the learning center. (they enter a room, full of controls and other stuff) Here's were every person starts. knowing the difference between us, and our enemies.

he turns on a hologram of a circling minifigure.

Johnson: they don't look like they're from earth.

Roy: that's because they aren't. /we are actually a secret program which protects earth from outsiders. if you'd follow me, you'll see what I mean.

They walk to another room. giant- but empty. just a portal is there.

Roy: this is were we go to other... places. These places aren't like earth, so that is why we need these helmets- for air- and other purposes too. So are you ready for your training?

johnson: sure.

the script is way longer- but i can't animate it, that's why i'm giving the script to you guys (feel free to take it. is there a thread for giving away scripts?) anyways- if you script just right- it should come to about a 15-20 minute film.

same with me.I`m new here but not to brickfilming.

This idea might sound ridiculuous but if I would write it I'd do it in a more subtle way, suggesting it and all that. I'm not sure wether or not I can pull it off though.
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Guy hates the world. He hates everything and has nothing. Except for angre and frustration. Everyone he ever loved has betrayed and hurt him in one way or the other, people have walked over him, mistreated him, even though he never did anything to deserve it. Nobody respects him. He wants to kill himself, but never does. There's something that keeps him from it. Than he learn about reincarnation, about how you need to live good and be good to have a good 'next' life. He believes in it, and now wants vengeance. Guy wants vengeance on the person he was in the previous life, because 'it's all his fault' he is so miserable now.

Yes, I wouldn't make it into a brickfilm, I'm considering turning it into a script though. Thanks for the feedback

Last edited by Pillow (December 4, 2010 (10:30am))

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Another idea of mine, I am in my disco mode atm:

The Crystal Unicorn Horn
In modern day NYC, where fashion is dominant, a fashion model is murdered. She is a perfectly symmetrical
human being and she was stabbed in the center of her body with a crystal unicorn horn and she was hung. The day of her death she was part of a fashion shoot. Days after he murder, photographs of a private fashion shoot she participated in that day surfaced. More models over time are murdered and soon the fashion world of New York City is on-edge and anyone is suspected of the murders. But as the murders progress, more and more 'private' photographs surface and the killer is slowly giving his identity away through little details in the dead eyes of the models in the photographs.

Note: The film would be like a disco slasher.

Maybe he could notice that he's turning into the same kind of person he was before and has to keep himself from doing so.

All excellent ideas. You would indeed make a phenomenal screenplay writer. You'd need to give some background on his previous life BEFORE he stepped into the body (if he's going to), as it would otherwise confuse the viewer. Other than that, you have several exceptional ideas (including yours, Jargon) so unfortunately you'll have to choose which one (or few) to use. Good luck with that!