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		<title><![CDATA[Forums - Bricks in Motion - Velocity I]]></title>
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			<title><![CDATA[Re: Velocity I]]></title>
			<link>https://bricksinmotion.com/forums/post/133154/#p133154</link>
			<description><![CDATA[[quote=TyphoonMovies]"As they face each other the ninja pulls out another katana.--Travis is unnaturally  angry and says, "Dammit! How many of those you got anyways?" The ninja stops, and grunt counts. Travis, is both annoyed and impatient, and he simply pulls out a gun saying, "Learn to count." And shoots him, the ninja falls right down, then Travis looks around, and says, "Well that's the end of my shift." and walks away."[/quote]

^thats a pretty good ending :) 

@Brick...Like the story!  Might I suggest to get more of a backstory in if this story is meant to be apart of a serious, action series?  I started reading it and got the impression it was a slapstick comedy.. but then again i might be weird like that :lol:]]></description>
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			<pubDate>Fri, 16 Apr 2010 01:13:53 +0000</pubDate>
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			<title><![CDATA[Re: Velocity I]]></title>
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			<description><![CDATA[That is very interesting. However I must say that the beginning could use [i]some[/i] work. Maybe Travis should have some kind of history as a ninja, and the intro sequence is of him training, and then him running away for a normal life...
I think it should end like this: "As they face each other the ninja pulls out another katana.--Travis is unnaturally  angry and says, "Dammit! How many of those you got anyways?" The ninja stops, and grunt counts. Travis, is both annoyed and impatient, and he simply pulls out a gun saying, "Learn to count." And shoots him, the ninja falls right down, then Travis looks around, and says, "Well that's the end of my shift." and walks away.
Hope this helps...somewhat.... :shifty:]]></description>
			<author><![CDATA[dummy@example.com (TyphoonMovies)]]></author>
			<pubDate>Fri, 16 Apr 2010 00:01:10 +0000</pubDate>
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			<title><![CDATA[Velocity I]]></title>
			<link>https://bricksinmotion.com/forums/post/111602/#p111602</link>
			<description><![CDATA[I had an idea for an action movie and I've already outlined the plot. I could use some help with the ending, and also if i should change anything. Anyway, here it is:


Travis Sharpe is working in his office. Suddenly the window shatters and and a ninja attacks him. Travis is surprised and jumps out of his chair. The attacker hurls Travis' computer across the room, and pulls out a katana. Travis dodges the weapon and grabs a lamp-stand from the wall. He blocks the sword and continues to battle with the ninja until he smashes his enemy back out the broken window. He then runs out of his office and presses the elevator button. As the door is opening, the ninja reappears and runs at him, but Travis slips in just before the ninja gets to him. The ninja's sword suddenly pierces through the elevator door. Travis leaps back but the sword is pulled out. Elevator music starts to play and Travis notices a scared-looking guy in the elevator, shaking and staring at him. A few floors up, the door opens and the scared man rushes out. The door closes again and the music continues playing. The elevator chimes and the door opens. A janitor and another guy walk in and the elevator continues, Travis looks away and the other guy lets out a muffled shout as he is pulled into the air. Travis looks back and says to the Janitor, "Hey? Wasn't there somebody there?". The janitor shrugs and Travis looks away, just as the janitor is pulled into the air. Travis hears the yell and spins around, grabbing the mop. The ninja drops into the elevator and they start to fight, but they are soon interrupted by some people coming on to the elevator. They stop fighting for a while until everyone leaves. Travis continues to fight the ninja and when the elevator stops, then he jumps out the doors onto the roof of the building. Travis grabs a pipe from the ground and continues to fight with that. Travis manages to knock the sword out of the ninja's hand and it flies into the building's sign. Travis runs for the sword but the ninja throws some shurikens at him. He blocks them with a piece of metal on the ground, and pulls the sword out of the wall. As they face each other the ninja pulls out another katana.
This is where I need some help. What should happen next/how should it end. I don't want it to be much longer, and Travis should probably kill the ninja. Otherwise anything could happen...

This will be the first of probably more of the same series.]]></description>
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			<pubDate>Wed, 27 Jan 2010 00:55:40 +0000</pubDate>
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