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			<title type="html"><![CDATA[Re: Script Feedback?]]></title>
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			<content type="html"><![CDATA[[quote=mobiledeli]I read it. First thing is I wouldn't make the death troopers funny... because then they're not scary.[/quote]

hmm. i want to leave the punch line in there, but that's an interesting point. maybe i'll have them say it in a dry, robotic way and remove the laughter so it doesn't weaken their characters. that might make the scene funnier too. thanks for the feedback!]]></content>
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				<name><![CDATA[realmichael]]></name>
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			<updated>2010-07-11T03:33:53Z</updated>
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			<title type="html"><![CDATA[Re: Script Feedback?]]></title>
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			<content type="html"><![CDATA[[url]http://dl.dropbox.com/u/1549109/lego%20film%20script.doc[/url] here you go noodle, sorry i forgot about the stupid docx format. and as for the spellcheck, it's not that i didn't spell check it, its just that harry potter spells aren't exactly in the MS word dictionary]]></content>
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				<name><![CDATA[realmichael]]></name>
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			<updated>2010-07-11T03:14:28Z</updated>
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			<title type="html"><![CDATA[Re: Script Feedback?]]></title>
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			<content type="html"><![CDATA[I read it. First thing is I wouldn't make the death troopers funny... because then they're not scary.]]></content>
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				<name><![CDATA[mobiledeli]]></name>
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			<updated>2010-07-11T02:50:02Z</updated>
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			<title type="html"><![CDATA[Re: Script Feedback?]]></title>
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			<content type="html"><![CDATA[Can you post a .doc file for those of us still running Office 2003?

I'll be honest, though... Harry Potter + Star Wars does not sound encouraging. Not to mention the fact that you didn't even bother to spell check it. But I'll wait until I actually see the script to pass judgment.]]></content>
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				<name><![CDATA[Noodle]]></name>
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			<updated>2010-07-11T02:34:59Z</updated>
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			<title type="html"><![CDATA[Script Feedback?]]></title>
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			<content type="html"><![CDATA[I'm working on scripting a short film I want to make. It's going to be a harry potter / star wars comedic mash-up. I think I've got some pretty funny lines in here, but some of the other parts drag a bit. Any feedback on the script would be much appreciated! The script can be viewed here: [url]http://dl.dropbox.com/u/1549109/lego%20film%20script.docx[/url] (yes, i'm aware my spelling sucks. sorry about that, this is just a quick draft)]]></content>
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				<name><![CDATA[realmichael]]></name>
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			<updated>2010-07-11T02:13:33Z</updated>
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