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			<title type="html"><![CDATA[Re: Sudden trouble]]></title>
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			<content type="html"><![CDATA[sadly, i have stopped the making of sudden trouble due to the fact that i am not ready for big projects.
:(]]></content>
			<author>
				<name><![CDATA[Owen Garcia]]></name>
				<uri>https://bricksinmotion.com/forums/user/141793/</uri>
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			<updated>2020-03-24T15:17:42Z</updated>
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			<title type="html"><![CDATA[Re: Sudden trouble]]></title>
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			<content type="html"><![CDATA[[b]923 pictures![/b]
[i](i will keep updating this to the right amount)[/i]]]></content>
			<author>
				<name><![CDATA[Owen Garcia]]></name>
				<uri>https://bricksinmotion.com/forums/user/141793/</uri>
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			<updated>2020-03-16T00:31:47Z</updated>
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			<title type="html"><![CDATA[Re: Sudden trouble]]></title>
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			<content type="html"><![CDATA[today i did some animation. i am getting closer! :)]]></content>
			<author>
				<name><![CDATA[Owen Garcia]]></name>
				<uri>https://bricksinmotion.com/forums/user/141793/</uri>
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			<updated>2020-03-16T00:30:37Z</updated>
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			<title type="html"><![CDATA[Re: Sudden trouble]]></title>
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			<content type="html"><![CDATA[[b]923 pictures![/b]
[i](i will keep updating this to the right amount)[/i]]]></content>
			<author>
				<name><![CDATA[Owen Garcia]]></name>
				<uri>https://bricksinmotion.com/forums/user/141793/</uri>
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			<updated>2020-03-07T14:24:11Z</updated>
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			<title type="html"><![CDATA[Re: Sudden trouble]]></title>
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			<content type="html"><![CDATA[i am animating now! i will be on discord!]]></content>
			<author>
				<name><![CDATA[Owen Garcia]]></name>
				<uri>https://bricksinmotion.com/forums/user/141793/</uri>
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			<updated>2020-03-07T14:02:39Z</updated>
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			<title type="html"><![CDATA[Re: Sudden trouble]]></title>
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			<content type="html"><![CDATA[[url]https://imgur.com/a/7dN0yya[/url]]]></content>
			<author>
				<name><![CDATA[Owen Garcia]]></name>
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			<updated>2020-02-29T17:03:33Z</updated>
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			<title type="html"><![CDATA[Re: Sudden trouble]]></title>
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			<content type="html"><![CDATA[[b]My first dead line (March 2020) will sadly not be met. I will need to take more time to animate and edit. see you in April! [/b] :DD]]></content>
			<author>
				<name><![CDATA[Owen Garcia]]></name>
				<uri>https://bricksinmotion.com/forums/user/141793/</uri>
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			<updated>2020-02-29T15:43:59Z</updated>
			<id>https://bricksinmotion.com/forums/post/385068/#p385068</id>
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			<title type="html"><![CDATA[Re: Sudden trouble]]></title>
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			<content type="html"><![CDATA[i have started animating! i will do some more today/and/or/ tomorrow.]]></content>
			<author>
				<name><![CDATA[Owen Garcia]]></name>
				<uri>https://bricksinmotion.com/forums/user/141793/</uri>
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			<updated>2020-02-29T15:41:21Z</updated>
			<id>https://bricksinmotion.com/forums/post/385067/#p385067</id>
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			<title type="html"><![CDATA[Re: Sudden trouble]]></title>
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			<content type="html"><![CDATA[k]]></content>
			<author>
				<name><![CDATA[Owen Garcia]]></name>
				<uri>https://bricksinmotion.com/forums/user/141793/</uri>
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			<updated>2020-02-11T19:09:20Z</updated>
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			<title type="html"><![CDATA[Re: Sudden trouble]]></title>
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			<content type="html"><![CDATA[I'm always happy to help, but I'm not sure that you really need a script editor, as such. I think you know what your story is, so just keep going with it.

I would advise you to write the whole script first, for all of the episodes, as this will make it easier to see if any story beats could be moved or altered to suit the whole story.

Once you have more written, feel free to let me know and I shall take a look.]]></content>
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				<name><![CDATA[mad_hatter]]></name>
				<uri>https://bricksinmotion.com/forums/user/140594/</uri>
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			<updated>2020-02-11T10:50:28Z</updated>
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			<title type="html"><![CDATA[Re: Sudden trouble]]></title>
			<link rel="alternate" href="https://bricksinmotion.com/forums/post/384960/#p384960"/>
			<content type="html"><![CDATA[here is a script update <[url]https://drive.google.com/file/d/1dZtgL3S0TWHpc0YtTuk4U9O_EjfHGbpY/view?usp=sharing[/url]> the old one dont work]]></content>
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				<name><![CDATA[Owen Garcia]]></name>
				<uri>https://bricksinmotion.com/forums/user/141793/</uri>
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			<updated>2020-02-10T21:59:36Z</updated>
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			<title type="html"><![CDATA[Re: Sudden trouble]]></title>
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			<content type="html"><![CDATA[thanks so much![quote=AwesomepantsFilms]Looking good so far![/quote]]]></content>
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				<name><![CDATA[Owen Garcia]]></name>
				<uri>https://bricksinmotion.com/forums/user/141793/</uri>
			</author>
			<updated>2020-02-10T21:14:10Z</updated>
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			<title type="html"><![CDATA[Re: Sudden trouble]]></title>
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			<content type="html"><![CDATA[it is part one. And yes! He does want it so  he can save her. That is a good idea to change it that way and i will name the robber. I will think about what you said and i think i will make it better! I want YOU to be my script editor, and just tell me if you want to also! if you want to help me with it just PM me and ill tell you all the details and ill give you a permit to veiw and edit my script. but i cant change to much dialog because i have recorded some voices. thank you SOOO much for the tips![quote=mad_hatter]You say this script is finished? Is this just the first episode? 

I'm making an assumption here, but I guess the robber wants the 'ultimate emerald' so he can save his wife... If that is the case, I think the story would be better served having the flashback right at the end. Don't let the viewer know that the robber is/was good until the big reveal at the end. He can still look at the painting, but don't let the viewer know why he is feeling emotional. 

Show us more of the 'ultimate emerald'. It sounds fairly important, yet it only gets the briefest of mentions.

Consider naming the Robber. It'd make things easier to read. Really, as far as screenplay formatting goes, you shouldn't really put description into parenthesis in the action lines. You should be showing us that the Robber used to be good, not telling us. However, in this instance, I don't think it's too important, as this is only for you to work from. Just worth bearing in mind. :)[/quote]]]></content>
			<author>
				<name><![CDATA[Owen Garcia]]></name>
				<uri>https://bricksinmotion.com/forums/user/141793/</uri>
			</author>
			<updated>2020-02-10T21:12:33Z</updated>
			<id>https://bricksinmotion.com/forums/post/384957/#p384957</id>
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			<title type="html"><![CDATA[Re: Sudden trouble]]></title>
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			<content type="html"><![CDATA[Looking good so far!]]></content>
			<author>
				<name><![CDATA[AwesomepantsFilms]]></name>
				<email><![CDATA[legoawesomepants@gmail.com]]></email>
				<uri>https://bricksinmotion.com/forums/user/138584/</uri>
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			<updated>2020-02-10T14:43:10Z</updated>
			<id>https://bricksinmotion.com/forums/post/384952/#p384952</id>
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			<title type="html"><![CDATA[Re: Sudden trouble]]></title>
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			<content type="html"><![CDATA[You say this script is finished? Is this just the first episode? 

I'm making an assumption here, but I guess the robber wants the 'ultimate emerald' so he can save his wife... If that is the case, I think the story would be better served having the flashback right at the end. Don't let the viewer know that the robber is/was good until the big reveal at the end. He can still look at the painting, but don't let the viewer know why he is feeling emotional. 

Show us more of the 'ultimate emerald'. It sounds fairly important, yet it only gets the briefest of mentions.

Consider naming the Robber. It'd make things easier to read. Really, as far as screenplay formatting goes, you shouldn't really put description into parenthesis in the action lines. You should be showing us that the Robber used to be good, not telling us. However, in this instance, I don't think it's too important, as this is only for you to work from. Just worth bearing in mind. :)]]></content>
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				<name><![CDATA[mad_hatter]]></name>
				<uri>https://bricksinmotion.com/forums/user/140594/</uri>
			</author>
			<updated>2020-02-09T19:49:35Z</updated>
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