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			<title type="html"><![CDATA[Re: The Script Improvement Thread]]></title>
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			<content type="html"><![CDATA[Grammars not my strong point :P 

It would be great if you could tell me where the format needs editing and i can fix it up. 
Also how long do you think it would be? I'm thinking maybe 10 minutes but I haven't got much experience with longer Brickfilms]]></content>
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				<name><![CDATA[MovingBricks]]></name>
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			<updated>2011-08-17T02:32:41Z</updated>
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			<title type="html"><![CDATA[Re: The Script Improvement Thread]]></title>
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			<content type="html"><![CDATA[[quote=MovingBricks]here's the full script

[url]https://docs.google.com/viewer?a=v&pid=explorer&chrome=true&srcid=0B4Dft9hdhE3YOWQ4Nzc4ZWItOTFmNy00NmY4LTkyMGItYzQzNDRkZGIzNmE1&hl=en_GB[/url][/quote]

That was okay but try correcting your grammar and edit your script format a bit. [url=http://www.bricksinmotion.com/forums/topic/11253/how-to-write-a-professionallyformatted-screenplay/]This[/url] might help you.]]></content>
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				<name><![CDATA[Thunderbolt]]></name>
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			<updated>2011-08-17T00:26:01Z</updated>
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			<title type="html"><![CDATA[Re: The Script Improvement Thread]]></title>
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			<content type="html"><![CDATA[here's the full script

[url]https://docs.google.com/viewer?a=v&pid=explorer&chrome=true&srcid=0B4Dft9hdhE3YOWQ4Nzc4ZWItOTFmNy00NmY4LTkyMGItYzQzNDRkZGIzNmE1&hl=en_GB[/url]]]></content>
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				<name><![CDATA[MovingBricks]]></name>
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			<updated>2011-08-16T06:20:21Z</updated>
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			<title type="html"><![CDATA[Re: The Script Improvement Thread]]></title>
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			<content type="html"><![CDATA[Here's the first scene from my new film I'm working on. 
[url]https://docs.google.com/leaf?id=0B4Dft9hdhE3YYWRmODE0YzgtMWNmYS00YjNjLThkMDQtY2Q3NmU5ZDI2YjRj&hl=en_GB[/url]
I should have the full script done by next week sometime but just thought i'd get some feedback on what i've done so far.]]></content>
			<author>
				<name><![CDATA[MovingBricks]]></name>
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			<updated>2011-08-05T07:32:52Z</updated>
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			<content type="html"><![CDATA[[quote=Golden]Yes it is. Script "Improvement" Thread, perhaps?[/quote]

Fixed.]]></content>
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				<name><![CDATA[Thunderbolt]]></name>
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			<updated>2011-07-04T06:12:40Z</updated>
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			<title type="html"><![CDATA[Re: The Script Improvement Thread]]></title>
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			<content type="html"><![CDATA[Loool. Nice, Ratboy.

Hope you realise nobody talks like that anymore though. :P]]></content>
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				<name><![CDATA[Brickyman]]></name>
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			<updated>2011-07-03T22:55:23Z</updated>
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			<title type="html"><![CDATA[Re: The Script Improvement Thread]]></title>
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			<content type="html"><![CDATA[I'll start. [url=http://ratboyproductions.com/storage/Cockney Slang Sketch.pdf]Heres a script[/url] that I want to make into a Comedic Live Action sketch. Its about two builders who talk Cockney Slang. 

Now Cockney Slang originates from London and they use rhyming words to replace normal words, if you catch my drift. So town might be replaced by Bobby Brown. Sometimes you wouldn't have a clue what they mean, but I think in this sketch you may get an idea :P

I've made a couple of mistakes which I'll have to adjust later.]]></content>
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				<name><![CDATA[Ratboy Productions]]></name>
				<email><![CDATA[joshua@ratboyproductions.com]]></email>
				<uri>https://bricksinmotion.com/forums/user/838/</uri>
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			<updated>2011-07-03T21:30:35Z</updated>
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			<title type="html"><![CDATA[Re: The Script Improvement Thread]]></title>
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			<content type="html"><![CDATA[I don't write scripts. :)
I make up an idea, then I fill in the blanks with improvisation whilst animating or in between shots.
I don't see how you could improvise a script...]]></content>
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				<name><![CDATA[Squid]]></name>
				<uri>https://bricksinmotion.com/forums/user/3704/</uri>
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			<updated>2011-07-03T20:53:30Z</updated>
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			<title type="html"><![CDATA[Re: The Script Improvement Thread]]></title>
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			<content type="html"><![CDATA[Yes it is. Script "Improvement" Thread, perhaps?]]></content>
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				<name><![CDATA[Golden]]></name>
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			<updated>2011-07-03T20:43:47Z</updated>
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			<content type="html"><![CDATA[Isn't improvisation "making something up as-you-go-along"?]]></content>
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				<name><![CDATA[mcoov]]></name>
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			<updated>2011-07-03T19:13:54Z</updated>
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			<title type="html"><![CDATA[Re: The Script Improvement Thread]]></title>
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			<content type="html"><![CDATA[Why is it called the script "improvisation" thread when it's just to get feedback? Good thread idea, though.]]></content>
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				<name><![CDATA[Pillow]]></name>
				<email><![CDATA[vik12312@hotmail.com]]></email>
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			<updated>2011-07-03T16:10:03Z</updated>
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			<content type="html"><![CDATA[[quote=Thunderbolt]NOTE: While it's not a no no, I recommend you not to show scripts with language or sexual content.[/quote]
Couldn't you just give a warning beforehand?
Anyway, I like the idea of this thread. I may be posting something here soon.]]></content>
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				<name><![CDATA[Danimation]]></name>
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			<updated>2011-07-03T11:26:34Z</updated>
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			<title type="html"><![CDATA[The Script Improvement Thread]]></title>
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			<content type="html"><![CDATA[This is a place where you can show your scripts for people to give constructive criticism, ways to improve it etc. You can also post film ideas, but you'd rather post 'em [url=http://www.bricksinmotion.com/forums/topic/101/post-your-story-ideas/]here.[/url] Have fun!

NOTE: While it's not a no no, I recommend you not to show scripts with language or sexual content.]]></content>
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				<name><![CDATA[Thunderbolt]]></name>
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			<updated>2011-07-03T11:13:39Z</updated>
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